Friday, July 30, 2010

Blast from the Past, part 1

A while ago I was talking with one of my CPs, and she made the comment that she didn't believe I'd ever been a bad writer.*

I assured her that this was definitely not true.

But a picture's worth a thousand words, right??

****************** On Bold Prologues ********************
Part One
The Guild of Blood and Water not as good as blood & swash 


Jonah would never forget the affect the night of March 8, 1998 would have on him, or the people it would lead him to love, hate, and kill. This sounds like a query for Nathan Bransford! 


Even now, he could see the looks of terror on the faces of the Ensly family. Father, Mother, older sister, younger sister, younger brother, baby paternal aunt twice removed, third cousin to maternal grandmother's step-sister, rabbi of next-door neighbor's uncle's niece's boss's cousin...even the parrot had to be killed. Oh god no! Why the parrot??? Jonah did not pretend, even now, that he had known why they had to kill so many innocent people in one family. He'd better not pretend. 


It was all about making Mason Ensly come out. And she had come out with a vengeance, cunning, and ill will.Oh, really? This was all about making her come out? Poor parrot... 


guessing circa '98? Twelve years old. 

********* On Awesome Character Description ************


Raine laughed and picked up the menu. She had let Tony and Blanche convince her to go to Pulse Beat, the new restaurant, with Chase. She even let them dress her! 


She had on huge, baggy, white jeans with large rips all over. Under, she was wearing royal blue tights that matched her T-shirt. To top it off, she had on bright blue Nikes with green laces that glowed in the dark. 


Her hair was done in a cresent shaped twist that was held in place by a green band that matched her shoelaces. 


Chase was dressed more mildly with black jeans, green shirt and black hightops. He had his black hair slicked back.


Raine thought he looked very cute, but she would never tell him she thought so. 


I'm not even sure I can comment on this one. 
In my defense, the circa is 1995, and I was nine years old. Yes, ladies and gents, this is an excerpt from my first novel


OMG! Let me put my hair in a neon green scrunchi before I read more! 


I think that's enough interwebz humiliation for one day.
But methinks there will be more of this feature in the future.




*please don't think that I think I'm an awesome writer. But I know I've made improvements since...y'know, these times. 

18 comments:

Crystal Cook said...

Well I think you're an awesome writer.

And, honestly, um. . . this really isn't that bad for being twelve and nine years old. I think I wrote something when I was twelve about a pony, and it was so much lamer than your examples.

Oh, man. That poor parrot had to die? That's so sad ;) But your comment had me ROFL!!! Seriously.

And when I was nine, I don't think I was even writing at all, i was probably just pretending I WAS a pony instead of writing about one.

I'm still giggling about that poor parrot. :)

Matthew Rush said...

Well I understand where you're coming from, and these are funny, but I have to agree with Crystal, these were both great pieces considering your age. Good to know you've kept at honing your craft, though!

Today's guest blogger is Rose Cooper!

Piedmont Writer said...

Love love love it, especially your comments. I don't think I have anything I've written from so long ago. And if I do, it probably has something to do with either horses or Dick and Jane.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

I know when I was your age I couldn't write a blog like this.Congratulations on a wonderful write.

Yvonne,

Cruella Collett said...

Not the parrot? Nooooo! Has it ceased to be and gone to meet its maker?

I love finding old stuff. It makes me appreciate that I am growing older (and wiser). There are still miles to go, but at least I don't have a MC that thinks he is Sherlock Holmes anymore...

Old Kitty said...

You wrote these when you were 9 and 12?!?! Shows what a fab imagination you had and moreso show your love of words and a good story!

Yay for you!

Thanks for sharing these snippet of your childhood passion!

Take care
x

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

I think those were impressive for someone so young!

Falen (Sarah) said...

Ha! I love the clothing desciption in the younger one.
still, the writing is pretty good.
i wish i could find some of my really old writing, but all i have is my fanfic from highschool (though it's still terrible)

Summer said...

at some point I think every writer looks back on older work and says- how? because there isn't a better word for it. lol Thanks for posting.

Jules said...

I think what you call bad is better than my now some-what okay.

I did love the clothing description though. I remember that look. :)

Lola Sharp said...

Dude, your youthful writing is better than a lot of writing a read from adults that 'write'. ;)

I do love your blue comments. *she types while removing green scrunch in shame*

Happy weekend frolicking!
Love,
Lola

Summer said...

Old Kitty, I certainly had an imagination. I found a screenplay that I'd started writing, evidently, while looking for these...completely forgot about it. And it was pretty interesting.


Now let me put on my green scrunchi... (Lola, it's only shameful if it DOESN'T match your shoelaces!)

Jemi Fraser said...

Not the parrot!!!

Thanks for sharing - those are great! :)

Shelley Sly said...

Your old stories aren't bad! They're SO much better than mine were at that age. In fact, you've inspired me to post my own sometime in the future. Thanks for sharing! :)

Simon C. Larter said...

Bahahaha! Excellent. It almost makes me want to pull out some of my high-school writing and reread it. Just for funsies, of course.

And then I would have to get blind drunk to try to erase the stories from my memory again. (This would, of course, be different from my usual getting blind drunk for the hell of it.)

Kimberly Franklin said...

I think you did a great job, for being so young. I cringe at the thought of looking at my writing back then. I have no idea what it was like.

Happy Friday!

The Words Crafter said...

The descriptive one isn't really bad. I've purchased books that weren't this well written, much less by a pre-teen! That's some pretty amazing stuff considering your age!

Palindrome said...

LMAO! I love the paternal aunt twice removed. You make-a me laugh.